No, you're not being harsh at all! I'm not sure if the lack of connectivity is because of the 'television' aspect of it, or if its just me.... I'll answer all of your questions, but really, if you HAVE questions after reading it, obviously I've failed somewhere. :D
Cuddy's bad luck was supposed to lead us to believe (along with House) that something bad really HAD happened to her. Sort of a false foreshadowing. She *almost* gets hurt repeatedly, and when the sign falls, we are supposed to believe that, although she's had a few close calls in the preceeding scenes, this time she was not so lucky.
The catheter patient was just a throw away scene, in that it is more for the sake of comedy, character development and/or scene development. The team had to hear about Cuddy's accident, and they had to be doing *something* instead of waiting around for Wilson to tell them about it.
As for the dating thing, I was trying to convey a progression of 'fantasies' or possible partners for House. He basically goes from a version of himself, to a version of Wilson to a version of Stacy. My point being that Stacy *is/was* his perfect match. It is sort of up to interpretation if he ends up with the 'real' Stacy, or just a fantasy version of her. Personally, I would love to see him end up with Wilson, but as this was not written with Fandom in mind, I didn't go there. ;D
Thanks very much for the concrit. I think you are totally bang on. Generally I tend to overexplain things, and in an attempt to not spoon feed the reader, perhaps I was too vague. My main goal was to prove (hopefully to an agent) that I could write convincing dialogue and story lines, and obviously, continuity and connectivity would be part of that. I'm glad that you enjoyed it anyway! Thanks for reading and reviewing! <3
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Date: 2007-12-10 04:46 am (UTC)Cuddy's bad luck was supposed to lead us to believe (along with House) that something bad really HAD happened to her. Sort of a false foreshadowing. She *almost* gets hurt repeatedly, and when the sign falls, we are supposed to believe that, although she's had a few close calls in the preceeding scenes, this time she was not so lucky.
The catheter patient was just a throw away scene, in that it is more for the sake of comedy, character development and/or scene development. The team had to hear about Cuddy's accident, and they had to be doing *something* instead of waiting around for Wilson to tell them about it.
As for the dating thing, I was trying to convey a progression of 'fantasies' or possible partners for House. He basically goes from a version of himself, to a version of Wilson to a version of Stacy. My point being that Stacy *is/was* his perfect match. It is sort of up to interpretation if he ends up with the 'real' Stacy, or just a fantasy version of her. Personally, I would love to see him end up with Wilson, but as this was not written with Fandom in mind, I didn't go there. ;D
Thanks very much for the concrit. I think you are totally bang on. Generally I tend to overexplain things, and in an attempt to not spoon feed the reader, perhaps I was too vague. My main goal was to prove (hopefully to an agent) that I could write convincing dialogue and story lines, and obviously, continuity and connectivity would be part of that. I'm glad that you enjoyed it anyway! Thanks for reading and reviewing! <3